Lipstick
A woman who uses those big beautiful eyes of innocence to lure the knight to her aid. This man has realized in humour that he is only the lipstick in her handbag,
and yet again another no rhymer, I like this change of style, I never thought I could make it work, so thank you all for your encouragement, it has helped me to grow as a writter….Thanxz ; ) Just read over it, it does rhyme a little, oops, it’s in the blood, lol
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# 1 ARTISTS OF REDBUBBLE , ! 100% !, ! Creative Writing & Poetry !, "Poetry and Beautiful Women" , All Around the Styles, All Out Emotion, All Things Poetic, Artistic, Philosophical, Creative, Talented, and Unknown, Freedom In Words & Art, Freedom to Shine, Masterpieces: Literary Workshop, Shameless Self-Promotion and WMGSuck it in and take the punch,
cave my heart and steal my air,
crack these ribs and sink it in,
pierce this love with laughing friends,
and bin this skin I marked for you.
You left without sorrow,
without a tear in your eye.
I stood by your side through thick…
I’m thick,
your brainless stepladder,
your mindless scapegoat,
the knight that grows in dreams,
yet tossed aside when,
there rides a blacker heart,
with the blackest horse.
The Joker with a swagger,
and slick catching eyes,
the one with the guise,
like the Halloween Freddy,
not quite the same underneath,
just a quivering sack of bones,
needing looks to bless his side…
And I watch as you return inside,
to the quiet, shy, porcelain doll.
Then I wonder the predator,
that sponged by my side.
How stupid!
How blind!
How intolerably numb,
my Ice Queen of silence,
I,
the fool that dressed her side,
as the man with the scars,
who looked good with the Jack,
and even better,
with a knife placed firmly in his back!
Big eyes watch as her teeth set in,
like a horror movie in reality,
as the slick Joker stands in pride,
with a gun at his back,
I laugh,
I am free from the unseen,
the mask wearing innocence,
the claw yielding kitten I thought fed of my love.
How dumb of me,
yet clever of her,
men as a handbag,
her lipstick of taste,
with that ever-changing shade.
wigs
great words…
Spraven replied
Thanxz wigs, glad you liked this ; )
JenniferB
Brilliant writing! It has shades of the black widow in it! lol, you were right, it did end with a death, but it wouldn’t have read so potently had it been written any other way. :
) Ooh it’s 4:30pm and I’ve only just woken up!!! that’ll teach me! :)Spraven replied
LOL, yeah, see what I mean, death, death, deth. I hope this isn’t a future warning for my own love, lol, I like my life!!
Thanxz for the commetn JenniferB!!
Have you been up th whole night, LOL
Spraven replied
Thanxz for fav to JenniferB!!
Astoreth
;-) ...........
Spraven replied
Thanxz Astoreth, much appreciated ; )
Spraven replied
Thanxz for Fav too ; )
Antanas
great writing
Spraven replied
Thank you Antanas, I appreciated your time and comment mate ; )
JenniferB
yep… I burnt the midnight oil and stayed awake around the clock, and somehow because of it I lost an entire day! lol :-)
Spraven replied
Sleep deprivation is wierdly cool, are you enjoying the shadows, lol
JenniferB
hahaha! the shadows don’t bother me too much, but the strange little green creatures jumping up and down on the end of my bed are a bit of a worry! ;-)
Spraven replied
Lmfao, ah the green dude’s, I can remember them when I was tripping in a cell, lol
linaji
Love this piece Spraven!!!
Spraven replied
Thanxz linaji, I just thought the cleverness of woman should be seen ; ) I’m glad you loved this!!
Spraven replied
and thanxz for the fav friend, I always forget to say that…..
Rhenastarr
Another thought provoking piece. Parts of it dwelll in darkness but a nice read none the less.
Spraven replied
Thanxz again, yeah, my work usually is around darkness, though it is evolving, Silent Love is about tree’s, a change from normal stuff, lol
Thanxz again friend!!
butchart
wonderful how you’ve told us so much about the characters in such a small space… and in an enigmatic way where we have to fill in the details for ourselves…. what is it that makes us attracted to the darker side of a person’s make up….. i wonder about this alot…........... wonderful thinking piece….... (i didn’t miss the rhyme game at all)........b
Spraven replied
Great, I am happy you enjoyed this piece and that non-rhymer’s aren’t a problem, this style is new to me. And yes I have seen woman actually do this!!!LOL, Thanxz for your comment butchart, much apprecaited!!
Ming Myaskovsky
This one hell of writing and one hell of lipstick, I’ll remember this when I apply my lipstick ;D
Spraven replied
LOL, glad you liked this Ming!!
Shoaib .
wow !!! amazing extended metaphor
i m very impressed by reading all your work spraven
men as handbag being carried around till her lipstick changes …
damn thats so freaking awesome
haha
wish i came up with it first hahah
Spraven replied
Ha, ha, thanxz mate, why don’t you do another version?!
Thanxz for the comment!!
colorblind
lol yea i pretty much agree with the comments applied before hand
lol especially with shoaib
thumbs up
your work is real blazing man
liking this to the max…....thumbs up
Spraven replied
Thanxz dude, that is really apprecaited friend!!!
Shoaib .
now there is an idea
Kristina Sans
This is wonderful, I love how every line just flows the way it would in your mind without any over- thought to it, it’s pure – brilliant
Spraven replied
Thank you friend, I’m glad you liked this ; )
and thank you for the 2 favs, it’s an honor, much appreciated!!!
Cynthia Lund T...
It’s deliciously dark.
Powerful.
Spraven replied
Ha, ha, I know, the dark side to woman, lol
Thanxz friend, I appreciate this comment ; )
Shoaib .
Spraven replied
Wow, really appreciated big time mate, thanks for this honor friend!!!that’s cool as f*k!!
Louise. C. Thomas
Spraven this is gorgeous :)) I love the metaphor, as so many others have said before me, and I love the heroine’s (coz she kind of is…!) slightly cruel but very clever philosophy; men are like lipstick, match ‘em to your outfit! :)) Congrats on the feature xx
Spraven replied
Lol, yeah, they are very clever friend, with a hint of cruel ; )
Thanxz Loulou6 for the great comment and the fav, it’s very much appreciated!!
Narcissus17
This is a poem with stamina; that is, it stands above others. The poem is kinda an extensive metaphor, but we only see that at the end “men as a handbag, her lipstick of tast.” Fantastically written.
i think there’s a typo line 9?
:-)
Spraven replied
Hey, thanks for the that mate, do think anyone else noticed, lol
Yeah, it’s just big metaphor, glad you liked this friend!!
I appreciate your comment N17 ; )
Narcissus17
helene ruiz
very clever writing….i could almost see the color of the lipstick!
Spraven replied
Lol, aye, red for danger, lol…..Thank you friend, I appreciate your comment ; )
Kasey Cline
WOW!!!!! Another wow from me Mr Flame face!!!! “Lipstick in her handbag” thats classic!
Spraven replied
Lol, thanxz Kasey, what would red be? Seductive? I don’t know please tell, I feel stupid now, lol
I want to correct that comment…..
I thought I would show the dumbness of us men at times, when we let woman blind us and use us like lipstick, a perfect one for woman to laugh at and at us, lol
Thanxz again friend!!!
Kasey Cline
Oh and red is not danger!!! Just so you know!!!
Kasey Cline
Never laugh at you!
Red is my color!!! Red is power, seduction, passion lust, love, beauty…....Its all the good and not the bad!!!!
Spraven replied
Lol, ahh, now I see, and yes it’s all the above, I think Roger Rabbit and think danger, lol